Granted, I did not look at a photo or someone else’s hair. That may just solve everything. I was mostly concern with color and smoothing, to form it out and just see if it’ll look better in any way than it did before. I used different pencils as well.
Looks about the same as last time. About a week ago. So, it’s starting to look like that I have the coloring. However, I really need to look at hair and see how it folds. Shadow can also mean “separation”. In other words, see the hair as planes (but you’re told to do that anyways for the majority of a portrait).
You need to trace the flow of the hair.
Also, the hair above doesn’t look symmetrical so that’s something else for me to work on.